Talk:After Last Night/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 07:37, 28 March 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

I will crack on with this right away! --K. Peake 07:37, 28 March 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• WP:OVERLINK of D'Mile under producer(s) since I think he can be recognized from his name in songwriter(s)
• Mention in the opening sentence that it is from their debut studio album
• "It was solely released as an urban contemporary radio single" → "It was released to urban adult contemporary radio as the fifth single from the album" with the wikilink and moving the date with labels to the end
• Place the writing sentence as the second one of the first para, then production and followed by release
• ""After Last Night" was written by" → "The song was written by" and shouldn't you use .Paak's stage name in prose since he is a main subject?
• "Jeremy Reeves and Ray Charles McCollough II." → "Jeremy Reeves, and Ray Charles McCollough II."
• "Reeves and McCollough II," → "Reeves, and McCollough II,"
• ""After Last Night" is a" → "It is a"

 Not done The sentence should start with the name of the song

• Pipe funk to Funk music
• "The track received positive reviews" → ""After Last Night" received positive reviews"

see above

• Either use the track or the song, not both. --K. Peake 07:46, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

• Fixed. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 08:06, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

• "who noted the track's sexiness" → "who noted the sexiness"
• "praised Thundercat and Collins's appearance." → "praised Thundercat and Collins's appearances."
• "on Billboard's Hot 100 and 17" → "on the US Billboard Hot 100 and number 17"
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine)
• "this led the album to become" → "this led An Evening with Silk Sonic to become"
• Mention the release year of Toni Braxton's self-titled album
• "also sang "After Last Night"" → "also sang the song" and this is fine being in the lead because there's no promotion section possible as far as I'm aware

 Done

Background and release

• This section is severely lacking in background; you can easily add info about how the members of Silk Sonic became involved with each other
• "He furthered, "everything" → "He furthered that "everything"

 Done

Production

• If the above section is not expanded to more than one para, merge this with it as the second para and retitle to Background and production

• How do you want me to proceed with it after adding more info? MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 21:02, 31 March 2023 (UTC)

• Remove wikilink on Thundercat
• "Jeremy Reeves and Ray McCullough II." → "Jeremy Reeves, and Ray McCullough II."
• "D'Mile and the latter four" → "D'Mile, and the latter four"
• "played guitar while D'Mile also played guitar, piano and" → "played guitar, while D'Mile also played the instrument, piano, and"
• Remove wikilink on Bootsy Collins
• "the viola and Ron Kerber" → "the viola, and Ron Kerber" with the wikilink
• Wikilink flute
• "Tess Varley and Chris Jusell played" → "Tess Varley, and Chris Jusell played"
• Pipe Cincinnati, Ohio to Cincinnati
• "in Virginia Beach. John Hanes" → "in Virginia Beach, while John Hanes"

 Done

Composition

• Audio sample looks good!
• "where Sonic sing a" → "where Silk Sonic sing a" since this is not the surname, also pipe chorus to Refrain
• "neo soul and" → "neo soul, and" plus shouldn't you add slow jam per AllMusic?
• "and as she talks Thundercat is" → "and as she talks, Thundercat is"
• Italicise ooos
• "singing simultaneously about" → "both singing about" to be less confusing
• "and who is able to make a" → "and able to make a"
• "a detail which is made pleasant due to Mars's" → "a detail which is added to by Mars's" to be less biased
• "is in the key of" → "is set in the key of"
• "Jem Aswad writing for Variety described" → "Jem Aswad, writing for Variety, described"
• Invoke [5] at the end of the similarities sentence too
• "The lyrics were compared to" → "The lyrics were compared by him to"
• "Jon Dolan writing for Rolling Stone affirmed" → "Jon Dolan, for Rolling Stone, affirmed"

 Done

Critical reception

• Retitle to Reception and merge with the following section
• The word charm does not need speech marks around it
• "is one of the most seductive tracks by Mars's" → "amplifies the seductiveness of Mars's"
• "as "smooth and funky" and "chill"." → "as "smooth[,] funky", and "chill"." for correct grammar
• Reading Ye without the context reminded of my man for a moment, though he has been introduced earlier in the article so this is fine!
• "In a mixed review, Sheldon Pearce, for The New Yorker," → "In a mixed review for The New Yorker, Sheldon Pearce"
• Invoke [22] after both of The New Yorker sentences
• Italicise No Ripcord
• "from their rigid template". Rivers added that" → "from their rigid template", adding that"

 Done

Commercial performance

• Make this the third para of the above section
• "on Billboard's Hot 100 chart." → "on the US Billboard Hot 100."
• "the Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs at" → "the US Hot R&B/Hip-Hop Songs chart at"
• Pipe NZ Top 40 Singles Chart to Official New Zealand Music Chart
• Start a new sentence at "this achievement"

 Done

Personnel

• Good

Charts

• Good

References

• Copyvio score looks great at 25.9%!!!
• Italicize An Evening with Silk Sonic in the titles of refs 5, 10, 11, 13, 18, 21 and 23
• Ditto on ref 6 and shouldn't Sputnikmusic be cited as publisher?
• Italicize An Evening with Silk Sonic in the title and Paste Magazine → Paste and pipe to Paste (magazine) on ref 7
• Musicnotes → Musicnotes.com on ref 14
• Add url-access limited to ref 16

Is it really necessary to italicize An Evening with Silk Sonic in the refs? I have never seen this done before. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 11:15, 1 April 2023 (UTC)

• Since it is an album title, that would be appropriate. --K. Peake 07:46, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

   Done MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 08:04, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed! --K. Peake 09:25, 28 March 2023 (UTC)

  Thanks for the review. I will try to finish it during this weekend. I also left some questions. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 22:18, 31 March 2023 (UTC)

  @Kyle Peake: I believe I have addressed every issue, but please let me know if I missed something. I also left questions regarding the lead and production. MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 08:08, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

  ✓ Pass now, no issues are remaining and I did some brief copy editing; you were very smooth in dealing with all the comments! --K. Peake 08:45, 2 April 2023 (UTC)

  Thank you so much! MarioSoulTruthFan (talk) 12:41, 2 April 2023 (UTC)