Talk:American Dream (Casting Crowns song)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Calvin999 (talk · contribs) 23:43, 20 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Info box

You need a comma after 'Glow in the Dark Studio (Decatur, GA)' as you list another recording studio.
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
For the record label, a comma is fine. Don't need to use slashes.
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

What album is Declaration? Debut? second? 10th?
- The number of the album isn't nessecarily important here, but I did add the year of release. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
"American Dream" was made into a music video, the band's first, depicting the deterioration → "American Dream"'s accompanying music video, the band's first, depicts the deterioration
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
of family → of his family
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
If it got radio release, that means it was a single.
- That might be the usual case, but it was apparently not here - the record label insists only three singles were released. It really depends on whether or not the record label or radio release are more reliable. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
  - Lots of songs are released to radio as singles, Rihanna does it frequently. But if their record label insists only three were released, then I'll let this go. — AARON • ^TALK 16:13, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Background and recording

"American Dream" was produced by Mark A. Miller and Steven Curtis Chapman. It was recorded at Glow In The Dark Studio in Decatur, Georgia and at Zoo Studio in Franklin, Tennessee, and was engineered by Matt Goldman and Sam Hewitt. → No need for this to be by itself, just keep this section as one paragraph.
- Removed. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Composition

According to the sheet music published by Musicnotes.com, → Remove, sounds a lot better without
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
been described as being arena rock.[6] The song has been described → Try not using the same word so close
- Fixed? Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Chapman's album Declaration creating → Need a comma after Declaration
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Reception

Two really short sections. I would remove the sub-section titles, and have the critical, accolades and chart prose all as one paragraph.
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Live performances and other uses

Keep as one paragraph, single sentences by themselves doesn't look good.
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]
Not really supposed to have two audio samples. I'd remove this Acoustic one.
- Alright. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Music video

Again, one paragraph. In fact, I would rename Live performances and other uses to Promotion, and merge both sections as one paragraph.
- Done. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Status

Very short article, so not much to critique on or to fix. On hold. — AARON • ^TALK 15:42, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I believe I have responded to all issues. Toa Nidhiki05 16:08, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Thanks. Well done. Passing :-) — AARON • ^TALK 16:13, 24 June 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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