Talk:Bruno Mars at Park MGM/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: MarioSoulTruthFan (talk · contribs) 15:10, 25 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 08:45, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

It is reasonably well written.
a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
It is factually accurate and verifiable.
a. (reference section):

b. (citations to reliable sources):

c. (OR):

d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
It is broad in its coverage.
a. (major aspects):

b. (focused):
It follows the neutral point of view policy.
Fair representation without bias:
It is stable.
No edit wars, etc.:
It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall:
Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

I am honoured to be reviewing one of your articles again, will get through with this today! --K. Peake 08:45, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Shouldn't the end date in the infobox be December 31, 2024 since that is what the table cites as the last date?
Shouldn't you use "it was held" instead of it is since the concert residency is not cited as continuing after this year?
The Theater at MGM National Harbor is not sourced as being in Oxon Hill anywhere in the body and are you sure capitalisation should be used for "the" per MOS:THEMUSIC?
The Hooligans are not sourced anywhere as being an eight-piece band
"typically ended with" are you sure the present tense shouldn't be used here since you have for the rest of the concert info as such?
"praised the energetic and" → "praised the energy and"
Pipe MGM Resorts to MGM Resorts International
Where is the audience of all ages sourced in the body?
2022 Billboard Music Awards → 2022 Billboard Music Awards

Per MOS:THEMUSIC, should the Theater at MGM National Harbor and any similar instances really be capitalised?
"The first show of the residence" → "The first show of the residency" for consistency
The last sentence of the third para should end with "at both the venues aforementioned into December 2021." since the year was not mentioned for multiple sentences by now
Fourth para looks good!
"including one on January 6, 2024," → "including one on January 6," to avoid overusing the year 2024

The cover of "Pony" is not directly sourced
Wouldn't the mention of the power going out on NYE during "Locked Out of Heaven" work better as the sentence after the song's first mention?
If the mention of Ginuwine is the second one in the later para, remove duplicate wikilink
""Doo Wop (That Thing)" and a" → ""Doo Wop (That Thing)", and a"
Last para looks good!

"received positive reviews" → "was met with positive reviews"
"commented that"If the" → "commented: "If the" and re-invoke the ref at the end of this sentence per direct quoting
To avoid overquoting, re-word the first part of the second review to "wrote that these two kings"
2022 Billboard Music Awards → 2022 Billboard Music Awards
Update the statistic to $124.5 million out of 410,00 tickets, as of December 2024

On hold until all of the issues are fixed and also, I'm thinking could you add a picture somewhere here? --K. Peake 12:01, 19 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Hi @MarioSoulTruthFan: and @Kyle Peake: Did some of the points for prose and ref formats in my recent edit to make the review faster. You may strike them out if it's good, otherwise ping me! RFNirmala (talk) 12:52, 21 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]