Talk:Bryan v. MacPherson

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Hi, we are students in Brad Rosen's Law and Technology class at Yale University. Over the last ten weeks, we have been learning about and contributing to Wikipedia. User:cgiugale, User:npmakarov89 and User:Andersme created this article and are in the process of adding to and improving the content that currently exists. Please add any suggestions or advice below, thank you. Andersme (talk) 07:04, 5 December 2011 (UTC)

Amassador input

• The first reference in the article doesn't provide sufficient information. Who is the publisher of the source? Is there a link to it in the Internet? What is the page number (if any) of the source? etc. It is preferable if the citeweb template could be used for all references in the article. If the reference is a book, use the citebook template.

• The usage of external links in the body of the article violates the external links guideline under under WP:ELNO#EL19. (See footnote #6 at the end of that rule for an example.) Please remove all external links from the body of the article.

• I suggest using the 3 linked articles at the Further reading section as sources. There is some pertinent info in the articles linked that can be used to expand this Wikipedia article. Article expansion in Wikipedia is always encourage, when possible. It would be a "waste" if those sources are not used. Furthermore, the internal links to other Wiki articles should be placed in the See also section rather than at the Further reading section. If the internal links are placed in a See also section located above References, and the external links turned into inline citations, the Further reading section can be removed.

• The titles of each sections should not be all capitalized unless they are part of an official title or name. For example, Procedural History should be Procedural history. Also, Majority Opinion should be Majority opinion. This goes for all the other titles of the sections as well.

• I've added a category to the article. I'll be making further copyedits to wikify this article. Any other comments I'll need to make will be posted here. If you have any questions, please leave them here or on my talk page. Bejinhan talks 06:31, 10 December 2011 (UTC)

Feedback

This is a very good article, and it covers all the important facts of the case with an easy-to-follow structure.

I have a few suggestions for things to potentially work on or change:

• The timeline in the "Facts" section is a bit unclear. The second paragraph says that Bryan is driving at 7:30 AM after several other incidents have taken place, but there isn't a context for the previous events, so it's hard to tell how the events unfold exactly. Also, why is he wearing only his boxers; was he missing his house keys? Given the events that follow, some of these specifics might be significant.
• The Dissent section is empty, though perhaps it's under way
• In the "Implications" section, what exactly is meant by "government interest"; how is that used to determine whether the use of a taser is justified? The rule established by the case still seems vague, and I'm wondering if the case goes into any more detail on the circumstances when government interest would justify tasering. It might be useful to take a look at the Use of force continuum page and use that in describing the rule.

Great work! VM 03:45, 18 December 2011 (UTC) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Psykonautiks (talk • contribs)

Wikipedia Ambassador Program course assignment

This article is the subject of an educational assignment at Yale University supported by WikiProject Law and the Wikipedia Ambassador Program during the 2011 Q3 term. Further details are available on the course page.

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