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Nominator: Simongraham (talk · contribs) 09:46, 27 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Reviewer: Hog Farm (talk · contribs) 19:13, 31 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]


I'll review this again; my concerns from the prior review have been largely addressed. Hog Farm Talk 19:13, 31 December 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Arkansas Post is taking more work than I expected; I might not be able to get to this until this weekend. Hog Farm Talk 23:33, 2 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
  • "Roberts 2002, pp. 46–147." - you're wanting p. 47 for the end of the range, not p. 147 right?
    • Yes. Fixed.
  • The article body says Wyandotte had a beam of 43' 5", but the infobox has 43' even?
    • Amended for consistency.
  • "The contracts were issued in September 1862, and the yards incentivised to complete quickly by being given a $100 bonus for each day completed ahead of schedule and a similar penalty for each day late" - this should be $500 per the cited source (West p. 13) and Roberts p. 56
    • Good spot.
  • "As part of this deployment, Tecumseh sank four hulks and a schooner." - the DANFS notes that this was a Union effort to block the channel; this should be clarified in the text so that this isn't assumed to be an action against enemy vessels
    • Added.
  • "On 18 February, Canonicus captured the steamer Deer, the only member of the class to do so" - this needs to be rephrased somewhat. The intended meaning is that Canonicus was the only ship of the class to capture a prize, but as it is written right now, it implies that Canonicus was the only ship to capture the Deer.
    • Good point. Clarified.
  • Silverstone 1984 and Smithwreck are listed as sources but are not used; I would recommend removal or moving to further reading, the latter only if they have a significant connection to the article subject.
    • Good spot. A relevant fact has been added from one and the other removed.

This is in much better shape than it was the last time; good work here. Hog Farm Talk 23:00, 5 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]

@Hog Farm: Thank you for your kind comments. I believe all the amendments you noted are made. I have also taken the opportunity to remove the duplicate links that I previously missed and made some other small changes as a general tidy up. Please tell me if there ia anything else you would like changed. simongraham (talk) 02:29, 6 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.