Talk:Engineer boot/GA1
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Reviewer: Mike Christie (talk · contribs) 12:15, 10 February 2018 (UTC)
I'll review this. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:15, 10 February 2018 (UTC)
I've never seen the word "shaft" used for the vertical part of a boot, and a quick look at our boot article doesn't find the word. Is this standard terminology? You use "stovepipe legs" later in the article; I'd have thought "legs" would be more natural for most readers. If you want to keep "shaft", since I see the term is used again later, I'd explain it on first use.- Seems standard enough to me [1][2][3]. It also comes up in plenty of our other boot articles (cowboy boot, motorcycle boot, Hessian (boot), Rigger boot, Boot fetishism). Changed the "leg" mention to shaft, as this actually appears to be the preferred word for that part of the boot. Added a clarification, "(vertical portion that fits around the leg)", though I honestly don't think its necessary.
- I'd cut the clarification; it looks like it's just a word I didn't know, and I hate it when an ignorant reviewer makes me change an article I've worked on to suit their ignorance. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 03:30, 12 February 2018 (UTC)
- Seems standard enough to me [1][2][3]. It also comes up in plenty of our other boot articles (cowboy boot, motorcycle boot, Hessian (boot), Rigger boot, Boot fetishism). Changed the "leg" mention to shaft, as this actually appears to be the preferred word for that part of the boot. Added a clarification, "(vertical portion that fits around the leg)", though I honestly don't think its necessary.
an ankle strap style that revolved around metal rings
: what does "revolved" mean here?- Revised as "Quickly adopted by the United States Cavalry, they featured an ankle strap that attached to metal rings, a style which may have served as inspiration for the design of the engineer boot."
and fashioned over their "English Riding Boot" lasts
: given that "last" is a technical term here, I'd at least link it, and I'd suggest paraphrasing this to be a little easier for someone unfamiliar with the terminology to follow.- Ah, that was holdover text from an unreliable source I long removed. I've revised it to reflect current sourcing.
Why did "minimal stitching" make the boots ideal for firemen?- The source does not specify.
On the overall basis, engineer boots were subverted in the shoe market
: I don't know what "on the overall basis" means here, and "subverted" seems an odd word choice.- Revised as "Engineer boots were overtaken in the shoe market during World War II by the production of lace-up combat boot".
The first item in "In popular culture" is already covered in the article. If the other two points are mentioned in sources about the boot, which seems likely for The Young Savages but not the Billy Joel reference, judging by the sources, I'd integrate the information in the article and eliminate the section.- Done, integrated TYS reference into the body article.
The last two sources in the "References" section are out of order.- Fixed.
Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 12:33, 10 February 2018 (UTC)
- @Mike Christie: I've responded to your comments, thank you for the review. -Indy beetle (talk) 23:05, 11 February 2018 (UTC)
- Fixes look good, so promoting, though you may want to cut the clarification per my note above. Mike Christie (talk - contribs - library) 03:30, 12 February 2018 (UTC)