Talk:Fairy Cube

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Review: September 16, 2013. (Reviewed version).

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Reviews

Putting reviews here to add in later. Kaguya-chan (talk) 22:26, 7 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

Kaguya-chan (talk) 19:38, 13 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

One more.

IGN Vol.1 review

Kaguya-chan (talk) 21:35, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

And another.

Jason Thompson's review

Kaguya-chan (talk) 21:40, 28 January 2010 (UTC)[reply]

GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Fairy Cube/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Fearstreetsaga (talk · contribs) 13:06, 14 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I'll review this when I have time. Fearstreetsaga (talk) 13:06, 14 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Looks pretty good. Comments:

Plot

"Stumbling upon the scene of a murder and seeing a man retrieve a cube from the victim's body, Ian follows him back to his antique shop..." Ambiguous: Is it Ian's antique shop or the man's?
"Soon after, Ian finds himself killed by his own father..." Too verbose. How about "Soon after, Ian is killed by his own father..."?
"Ian encounters his maternal aunt Lise (梨世 Rise), a leanan sídhe like Kureha, who explains that Kureha left before she completely drained the life force of her husband" Whose husband?
How does Ian return to his body?
"...Kaito and Ainsel, secretly the consciousness of the door's sealing spell..." The meaning of this is unclear.
Also in the sentence above, it is said Kaito and Ainsel die together to close the door, and Ian and Rin use the energy of their belief to close the door. Do Kaito and Ainsel die to make it possible for the door to be closed, or is it that when they die, the door is closed (in which case the second part of the sentence wouldn't make much sense)?

Development

"Manga artist Kaori Yuki's earlier, related short manga "Psycho Knocker" (PSYCHO KNOCKER)..." Psycho Knocker doesn't need to be repeated in the parentheses.
Ref 2: Indicate the language the source is in. I notice there are also several other sources not in English with this same problem.

Release

Ref 13 only indicates that one of the volumes was released in a digital format, not that the whole series was.

Reception

Ref 21: Dead link
"According to Katherine Dacey of PopCultureShock in her review of the first volume, Fairy Cube succeeded in rising above sentimentality" Where in the review does she say that?
In ref 25, you refer to the publisher as "Pop Culture Shock", whereas in ref 26 and in the "Reception" section, you refer to it as "PopCultureShock". Which one is it?
"In her review of the final volume, Dacey expressed her feelings of annoyance that the characters spent much of the volume talking with very little action, and wrote that the story, despite a promising start, went downhill with the introduction of the beauty contest." The way it's worded implies that the beauty contest was introduced in volume 3, whereas in the source, the reviewer says it was introduced in the middle of volume 2 (if I'm not mistaken).
"how quickly the story happened" --> "how quickly the story progressed"

Lead

"reviews of later volumes varied" This could be made more clear. Do you mean the reviews were mixed? Or did they just differ from one another? Fearstreetsaga (talk) 12:42, 15 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I might have some more comments in the future. For now, I'll place this review on hold. Fearstreetsaga (talk) 17:24, 15 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Hi Fearstreetsaga and thank you for taking the time to review and making sure that this article is accurate! :) I think I've addressed most of your concerns now, if not let me know. :) For the rest:

Getting the door closed requires a sacrifice, the sealing spell (Ainsel, its consciousness), and some energy, which is provided by the belief in fairies. (or at least that how I understood it; Yuki gets really confusing near the end.)
Ref 21 (the IGN one, right?) works for me, but perhaps not for you?
If you hold the mouse over the each volume under the "All the volumes in this series" section, it indicates that a digital edition is available for all of them. Alternatively, would you like me to cite each of the Viz volume refs for that sentence?
The sentences I tried to paraphrase of Dacey's review of Vol. 1 were: "In fact, I’d argue that it succeeds because of these outlandish touches–in another manga-ka’s hands, the story would be desperately twee, a sentimental tale about a gentle boy who befriends a winged sprite. Not so with Fairy Cube, an intoxicating–if occasionally ridiculous–mix of horror, romance, and revenge." What would you suggest? :) Rapunzel-bellflower (talk) 21:47, 15 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Your changes look great. Good job.

Ok
Hmm, that's weird. When I click the link, it gives me a 404 error. Toolserver also indicates the link is dead. This link from IGN works for me though.
I think it would be a good idea.
You could try removing the first part ("Fairy Cube succeeded in rising above a potentially sentimental plot of a young protagonist's friendship with a fairy") and just indicating that she though the series succeeded due to Yuki's use of "outlandish touches". Fearstreetsaga (talk) 23:15, 15 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

All done. :) Rapunzel-bellflower (talk) 01:42, 16 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

I took another look at it. Comments:

Did the company manage to open the door? Because later in the section, it is stated that the door is closed, which wouldn't make much sense if it wasn't already opened.
"reveals that Tokage is Ian's stillborn twin Isaiah" Isaiah isn't introduced anywhere else in the section, so the significance of including the name here is hard to ascertain.

Fearstreetsaga (talk) 21:21, 16 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Okay! Does it make more sense now? Rapunzel-bellflower (talk) 22:43, 16 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

Yes, it looks good now. I'm satisfied the article meets the GA criteria, so I'll pass it. Great work. Fearstreetsaga (talk) 23:14, 16 September 2013 (UTC)[reply]

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