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Wiki Education assignment: Behavioral Ecology 2022

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This article was the subject of a Wiki Education Foundation-supported course assignment, between 30 August 2022 and 9 December 2022. Further details are available on the course page. Student editor(s): Darreciel (article contribs). Peer reviewers: B1deng, Reni.Akande, Friedaloo.

— Assignment last updated by CalJS (talk) 01:43, 14 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

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For my peer review, I made grammatical fixes throughout the article (spacing, word order, addition of conjunctions, italicization, etc.), fixed spacing/punctuation with reference numbers, and made some general changes to the "Habitat and Distribution" section, the "Male-Female Interaction" subsection, and the "Enemies" section.

Some comments that I have abou the article include the following:

For the “Breeding” and “Reproduction and Life Cycle” sections, I believe that there is a repetition of information in both sections, but I wasn’t sure which section was written by you, so I didn’t want to delete something that contributed to your 3rd assignment. I would suggest going over the two and combining them. Then making “Breeding” a subsection of “Reproduction and Life Cycle”. The beginning of the “Mating” section seems to fit more into the topic of breeding. I would initially start with the mating calls information. I would also take out the “Male-male interaction” section because it does not give any true information.

An overall suggestion that I also have would be to use the abbreviated version name of the frog throughout the paper (H. fleischmanni) rather than interchanging between the abbreviated version and the full version.

In the “Protective Coloration” the 3rd to last sentence, you stated that birds and snakes “have a presence in their bodies,” but you did not specify what that was, which left me very confused. I would clarify that and rewrite the sentence. The last sentence in ‘Protective Coloration” doesn’t give must information to the topic, nor is it elaborated on, so I would suggest deleting it.

I would suggest elaborating more in the “Interactions with Human and Livestock” or deleting that section entirely because it does not give much information about the frog under that topic. Reni.Akande (talk) 20:26, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

You made a number of serious errors that I had to fix on this page. You changed the name of Fleischmann's glass frog to the "fleischmanni's glass frog" and even changed the last name of Carl Fleischmann (his actual name) to "Carl fleischmanni" (with the lowercase 'f' included). This is incorrect. The latin name of the frog is Hyalinobatrachium fleischmanni, named after Carl Fleischmann. The added "i" at the end is a form of Latinization common in scientific names which have been named after a person's surname. So again, the correct name of the frog is Fleischmann's glass frog. These glaring errors remained on the page for over 2 months, not sure how this happened, but please be more careful in the future. Bzzzing (talk) 18:06, 24 December 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Another Peer Review

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I shifted some of the sentences regarding mating and specific male-male interactions from other sections into the designated section and subsections. I also fixed some spelling mistakes (such as beings to begins). I added some information from the rest of the article to the lead section so that it could be more comprehensive and be more representative of the article.    Friedaloo (talk) 20:29, 18 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Peer Review

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Overall, I thought the article was fairly comprehensive and had a good amount of detail. I moved around some of the sentences in the description and also the protective coloration sections. I also made a fair number of syntax/wording changes to make the article flow more smoothly. For example, under breeding, I rewrote the sentence to be "Due to the large number of its natural predators, roughly 80% of the clutches are eaten and/or destroyed". One concern I had was your section regarding protective coloration. You state that the frog reflects infrared light, but later comment how this is hypothesized to serve as camouflage or thermoregulation. From what I'm remembering about light physics, if the frog is reflecting the infrared light, then these functions don't quite make sense. I'm wondering if there are any other sources you could find to corroborate this information. B1deng (talk) 21:54, 20 October 2022 (UTC)[reply]