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... that Dwight D. Eisenhower won 39 of the 40 states in the 1952 presidential election where the "Ike for President" advertisement (featured) was broadcast? Source: Citizens for Eisenhower. p. 111
Overall: "spent 95% of their television budget on broadcasting Stevenson's 30-minute long" 30-minute long what? (t · c) buidhe23:05, 3 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
I'll be reviewing this! Of course, while QPQ isn't required, if you fancy returning the favor, I have a list of GANs for the taking here. I also plan on adding more politics and history nominations within the next week, if you would prefer to wait for something more in your topic area. In any case, I'm excited to see this nominated, as my grandmother (who was in high school when it aired) cites this advertisement as one of her first television memories.
Thanks for taking the review. I'll definitely review your politics/history article as soon as I get chance. And it is really interesting to know your grandmother's experience. When I was doing my research for "Daisy", someone (on-Wiki) told me that he saw the ad as a young boy, and had "sleepless nights" after it! I don't assume anyone watching "Daisy" today will be scared. Same with "Ike for President"; it was a masterpiece for 1950s, but merely a cartoon today! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 22:33, 3 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Dwight D. Eisenhower was the commander of the Allied Expeditionary Force in Europe. It feels obvious, but should specify "during World War II"
"rejected all requests" → "denied all requests"
"and to him as the Chief of Staff"
After "referring to his nickname", I don't believe you need a colon or quotes around "Ike", just a comma
"After winning the Republican New Hampshire and Minnesota presidential primaries" → "After winning the Republican presidential primaries in New Hampshire and Minnesota"
Either "1952 presidential election" should be linked in the sentence with the Wood quote, or that sentence should specify Eisenhower's presidential campaign rather than just "the" campaign
"$19,500,000" → "$19.5 million" and "$58,500,000" → "$58.5 million" per MOS:LARGENUM
"The Eisenhower campaign spent mostly on their advertising campaign named "Eisenhower Answers America"" → "Most of the advertising expenditure from the Eisenhower campaign was devoted to a television advertisement campaign titled "Eisenhower Answers America"." (checked against source and a little clearer)
Also, to be pedantic, I'd expand the page range in the attached reference to 265 from 266, as I had to go back to page 265 to check my revision against the source
Missing closing comma after "a campaign aide of Eisenhower"
For the captions on Cochran and Stevenson, I'd use those to reiterate why they are relevant (e.g. "Jacqueline Cochran, pictured here in 1943, coordinated the advertisement with the Walt Disney Company")
@Kavyansh.Singh: I'm responding to your request for a GOCE edit on the article Ike for President. Before beginning, I have a preliminary question. I'd like to edit (move) the article title to "Ike for President (advertising campaign). In the US advertising business, we rarely use the word "advertisement." as it is formal and doesn't really describe the Ike incident, which was in fact, a television advertising campaign. It included the 60 sec. commercial, a comprehensive media plan, a jingle, remarkable repetition and more. Incidentally, I don't think the article requires lots of copy editing; it's very good. Cleveland Todd (talk) 17:46, 31 March 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Kavyansh.Singh: OK. You make excellent points; I really don't want to make a mountain out of a molehill here. We'll leave "advertisement" alone. I will start on and hope to finish the copy edit over the weekend. I have identified several stylistic facets that I think I can upgrade, while keeping the thought processes and excellent logical narrative intact. Cleveland Todd (talk) 14:26, 1 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Kavyansh.Singh: I've done my preliminary edit. I like to step away at least overnight before doing the final search for misplaced commas and semicolons. Will mark this finished tomorrow afternoon. Outstanding article - really fascinating. I'm old enough to remember the campaign; Adlai Stevenson drove by our school once; the nuns paraded us all outdoors to watch him motor past. We all "liked Ike." Cleveland Todd (talk) 14:35, 2 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
It is really a privilege to hear from someone who actually witnessed the campaign! I have merely read about it and can just imagine what you witnessed! Last year, when I was working on Daisy (advertisement) (another interesting piece of history), an editor told me that he saw "Daisy" as a young boy, and had "sleepless nights". That really fascinated me! Perhaps, that was another era. Thanks a lot for helping with the article, and do let me know if there is anything you feel confusing, irrelevant, or missing in the article. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:40, 2 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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"spent 95% of their television budget on broadcasting Stevenson's 30-minute long" 30-minute long what? (t · c) buidhe 23:05, 3 March 2022 (UTC)
: Actually, I withdraw the original hook (due it it being not completely correct). Reviewer needed for ALT1:
Sure, I think of these two ALT1 is better. (t · c) buidhe 19:18, 1 April 2022 (UTC)
