Talk:Kyle Palmieri/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:45, 8 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

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Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV ()

3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant ()

Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

Infobox and lede

IPA pronunciation needs a reference, I recommend this one Done
Delink "American" per MOS:OVERLINK Done
Sentence needed in the first paragraph that he previously played for the Ducks and Devils, especially since the Devils are introduced sans-location and link in the second para Done
He split his first three seasons with the team split repetition of "split" Done

Early life

Comma after "Smithtown, New York" per MOS:GEOCOMMA Done
"moved to Smithtown for a few years" → "spent a few years in Smithtown" Done

Playing career

Amateur

Spell out and link New Jersey Devils for "Devils-sponsored teams" Done
"junior" should be capitalized in "16U Junior Devils" Done
Comma after "New Jersey state final" Done
Link hat-trick Done
What team drafted him in 2008? Done

Anaheim Ducks

Comma after "to his linemate Nick Bonino" Done
Comma after "He was returned to the AHL to begin the season" Done
"plus/minus" → "plus–minus" with the WL Done
"Upon being returned to the AHL after playing in seven games, Palmieri was selected" → "After playing in seven games for the Ducks, Palmieri was returned to the AHL, where he was selected" Done
Link AHL All-Star Classic Done
"first Ducks rookie" → "first Anaheim rookie" to reduce "Ducks" repetition in sentence Done
Some sentence should be mentioned about the end of the lockout and when he was promoted, as I thought at first that the hat-trick came when he was still an Admiral Done
second-youngest Ducks subject-verb agreement or missing word Done
Link "Western Conference Quarterfinal" to 2013 Stanley Cup playoffs Done
Link "2013-14 season" Done
"Ducks' topline" → "Ducks' top line" Done
"home-town" → "hometown" Done
Postseason stats for the 2014 playoffs? Done
Any idea why he was placed on injury reserve in December 2014? Done

New Jersey Devils

"second and third-round draft picks" → "second- and third-round picks" Done
Comma after "re-joined coach John Hynes" Done
Comma after "at the 2016 World Cup of Hockey" Done
"while maintaining a shot-percentage of 13.5%" → "while maintaining a 13.5 shot percentage." Done
"Upon rejoining the Devils, Palmieri reached the 500-games plateau" rejoining them after what? (The All-Star break, possibly?) Done
- It's the start of a new season. I will make it more clear
Stats for the 2018-19 season? Done

New York Islanders

In his debut game against the Flyers on April 9, Palmieri became the 512th skater to appear in an Islander regular-season game. Trivia Done
"In the Islanders final" → "In the Islanders' final" Done
"post-season goal" → "postseason goal" Done
Mention that the Isles lost to Tampa in the finals Done

Personal life

Link Mattituck, New York Done
Link United States Army, New York Army National Guard, and United States Army Rangers Done
Also, "ranger" should be capitalized Done
""who best exemplifies leadership qualities on and off the ice and has made a noteworthy humanitarian contribution in his community."" → ""who best exemplifies leadership qualities on and off the ice and has made a noteworthy humanitarian contribution in his community"." per MOS:LQ Done

References

"The Athletic" should be the work, not publication, and should have "|url-access=subscription" Done
Riverhead News Review, The New York Times, The Hockey News, and Sports Illustrated should all be work, not publication Done
Additionally, "Sports Illustrated" should be in the publisher parameter of The Hockey News Done
Per WP:ALLCAPS, [34] should be in title case Done
"nj.com" is actually the website for The Star-Ledger, so that should be the work param Done
Same for "Syracuse.com" and The Post-Standard Done

General comments

Images are properly licensed and relevant
No stability concerns in the revision history
Earwig is being slow af right now so I'll check it later
Hey Drake... where's the international play section? Done

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments, you know the drill by now. — Ghost River 16:41, 9 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

GhostRiver, All issues have been addressed. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 17:38, 14 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Everything looks good now, happy to pass! — Ghost River 03:52, 15 January 2022 (UTC)[reply]