Talk:One in a Million (Aaliyah album)/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Moonlighttt (talk · contribs) 16:21, 21 October 2023 (UTC)

Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 21:41, 12 June 2024 (UTC)

1. It is reasonably well written.

   a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):

   b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):

2. It is factually accurate and verifiable.

   a. (reference section):

   b. (citations to reliable sources):

   c. (OR):

   d. (copyvio and plagiarism):

3. It is broad in its coverage.

   a. (major aspects):

   b. (focused):

4. It follows the neutral point of view policy.

   Fair representation without bias:

5. It is stable.

   No edit wars, etc.:

6. It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.

   a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):

   b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):

7. Overall:

   Pass/fail:

(Criteria marked are unassessed)

This will run over the next two days! --K. Peake 21:41, 12 June 2024 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

• Infobox looks good!
• Merge the first paragraph with the second since two sentences is not worthy of its own para
• Pipe illegal marriage to Void marriage
• Add a comma after debut studio album
• The body does not appear to imply there was media scrutiny in prose, only turmoil
• "Vincent Herbert and Craig King," → "Vincent Herbert, and Craig King," per American English
• "before meeting previously unknown" should be re-worded to either "previous unknowns" or "the previously unknown" since it reads weirdly right now
• "[Pop music|pop]] and hip hop record" → "[Pop music|pop]], and hip hop record"
• Pipe trip-hop to Trip hop
• "funk and jungle music." → "funk, and jungle music."
• "abstinence and heartbreak." → "abstinence, and heartbreak."
• "towards its innovative production" → "towards the innovative production"
• Shouldn't you mention other countries One in a Million reached the top 40 in?
• Mention the certification was in the United States
• "becoming the album's highest-peaking single" → "becoming the highest-peaking single"
• "of the decades since its release." → "of the decades since release."

Background and development

• R. Kelly is not sourced as a songwriter for the album from what I can see
• "Japan and South Africa." → "Japan, and South Africa."
• Pipe illegal marriage to Void marriage
• "anxious about jumping from Jive to Atlantic and changing up" → "anxious" of transitioning from Jive to Atlantic and switching" or something similar, as the quote ends at anxious per the source

Recording and production

• Img looks good!
• "J. Dibbs and" → "J. Dibbs, and"
• "Craig Kallman,[a] Aaliyah's cousin and Blackground executive Jomo Hankerson, and" → "Craig Kallman,[a] Hankerson, and" per Hankerson's full name having been introduced previously
• [16] should also be invoked for the first sentence directly quoting the ref, also I can't see if the quotes are full sentences or not and if they are, please add the punctuation inside the speech marks per MOS:QUOTE
• "Hall's contributions never materialized" this is not directly sourced – the ref says that it was the work of the Hitman team, listing a number of them and then saying "others" so if he is meant to be part of the others, maybe re-word to something like "Contributions from the likes of Hall never materialized"
• "recording with Jermaine Dupri in Atlanta." → "recording with Dupri in Atlanta." per the artist already having been introduced and the overly obvious wikilink on Atlanta
• "to be included on the album;" → "to be included on One in a Million;"
• "to The Isley Brothers and The Clark Sisters." → "to the Isley Brothers and the Clark Sisters." per MOS:THEMUSIC
• "got him on the song"." → "got him on the song."" since this is a full sentence
• The co-writing of Rheji Burrell and Japanese edition inclusion need sources for the prose
• "just dynamic properties."" needs the singular speech mark to conclude the quote within itself
• Put more of Aaliyah's comments about the initial meeting into your own words per MOS:OVERQUOTE

Music and lyrics

• "pop and hip hop record." → "pop, and hip hop record."
• "on which Missy Elliott invites Aaliyah" → "on which Elliott invites Aaliyah" per her having already been introduced fully
• ""panting minimalist controlled" → ""panting, minimalist controlled" per the source
• The hums part for "Hot Like Fire" has too much direct quoting; for starters, you can do "to her new bae" → "to her new lover"
• Remove link on title track, as this was done in the previous section
• The term "bouncing" is not sourced anywhere for the audio sample
• The genre of "A Girl Like You" as hip hop is not sourced
• Remove wikilink on "If Your Girl Only Knew"
• "Connie Johnson from Los Angeles Times as" → "Connie Johnson from the Los Angeles Times as"
• "Aaliyah "chides a man" → "Aaliyah "chide[s] a man"
• Remove the links on "Choosey Lover (Old School/New School)" and "Got to Give It Up"
• "The Isley Brothers and Marvin Gaye" → "the Isley Brothers and Gaye" per MOS:THEMUSIC
• Wikilink falsetto
• Remove wikilink on Slick Rick
• Remove wikilink on "The One I Gave My Heart To"

Marketing

Imagery

• Put more of Baptise's quote into your own words per MOS:OVERQUOTE
• Most of the first sentence for the first product can be put into your own words, while the second is fine to remain as a quote
• "discussing the accompanying music video for" → "discussing the music video for" with the wikilink, although remove the link on title track

Release

• Remove wikilink on BET
• "The accompanying music video for the album's lead single" → "The music video for the album's lead single" with the wikilink, removing the wikilink on the single itself
• Wikilink The Source to itself
• "Sister 2 Sister and" → "Sister 2 Sister, and"
• "in the United States two weeks later, by Blackground Records and Atlantic Records." → "in the US two weeks later, by Blackground and Atlantic Records." per MOS:US
• "the UK, Germany, South Africa and Japan." → "the United Kingdom, Germany, South Africa, and Japan." since this is the first time the UK is mentioned
• Identify the 2001 successor as eponymous too because this is only one word to add regarding the self-titled record
• Remove link on Jive

Live performances

• Remove wikilink on MTV
• "To promote the album in the United Kingdom," → "To promote One in a Million in the UK,"
• "on November 2." → "on November 2, 1996."
• The New York Undercover performance can be kept, although the episode is not sourced as being the one where she performs the song by either of the refs so please delete that part
• Pipe Live with Regis and Kathie Lee to Live with Kelly and Mark
• "On February 21, she performed" → "Three days later, Aaliyah performed"
• The Grind is not sourced and while the Spice Girls are, no interview is shown
• "was also planning a" → "had also planned a" and remove the lack of materialization part since this is not said by the source and "had" is the closest we can imply here from it
• "Bone Thugs-n-Harmony and Mary J. Blige;" → "Bone Thugs-n-Harmony, and Mary J. Blige;"
• "In August, Aaliyah made a" → "Also in August, Aaliyah made a"
• Remove wikilink on "Hot Like Fire"
• "In September, Aaliyah performed" → "In September 1997, Aaliyah performed"
• Remove wikilink on "The One I Gave My Heart To"
• Italicize The Big Help, although this performance is not sourced by the archive and the link's dead
• "She additionally performed" → "Aaliyah additionally performed"
• Remove wikilink on BET
• "on November 26," → "on November 26, 1997"
• The Gift of Song gala is not sourced as having her specifically perform the song

Singles

• Remove wikilink on "If Your Girl Only Knew"
• "mostly directed towards its production" → "mostly directed towards the production" to avoid overusage of "it"
• "and the United Kingdom." → "and the UK."
• "The song's accompanying music video was" → "The accompanying music video was" because this implies it accompanied the song
• Remove link on "Got to Give It Up"
• "and depicts Aaliyah and her" → "that depicts Aaliyah and her"
• "Its accompanying music video, directed by" → "Its music video, directed by"
• "of its original artist Marvin Gaye." → "of its original performer Gaye."
• Remove link on "One in a Million"
• "on November 12." → "on November 12, 1996."
• "Its Hunter-directed accompanying music video" → "Its Hunter-directed music video"
• The certification should not have gold linked and change to RIAA with no link here too, as you already introduced its full name earlier in this article
• Remove link on "4 Page Letter"
• "Its accompanying music video was directed by" → "Its music video was directed by"
• Remove wikilink on "The One I Gave My Heart To"
• "on August 25." → "on August 25, 1997."
• Remove wikilink on "Hot Like Fire"
• The double A-side release is not sourced
• "The Darren Grant-directed accompanying music video for" → "The Darren Grant-directed music video for"

Critical reception

• "received generally favorable reviews" → "was met with generally favorable reviews"
• Remove or replace Sputnikmusic altogether – the "reviewer" is not named and any references of him even in the comments point back to Wikipedia having added it originally, WP:SELFPUB
• Remove wikilink on Age Ain't Nothing but a Number
• Remove wikilink on MTV
• ""If Your Girl Only Knew" and the title track" → ""If Your Girl Only Knew", and the title track"
• Per MOS:QWQ, the song titles inside double speech marks should use singular speech marks
• Remove link on pop
• Pipe Plugged In to Plugged In (publication) per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "a mixed review as he felt" → "a mixed review, as he felt"
• Remove wikilink on The Source and add something like the staff or editor of, also put some into your own words to avoid MOS:OVERQUOTE please

Accolades

Awards and nominations

• Write these out in prose instead please since the table is only three awards
• Pipe Best R&B/Soul Album, Female to Soul Train Music Award for Best R&B/Soul Album – Female
• Pipe Best R&B/Soul Single, Female to Soul Train Music Award for Best R&B/Soul Single – Female

Listings

• These have enough to remain as a table, although please write a summary above regarding the rankings because this is mentioned in the lead so should be written out
• Pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT

Commercial performance

• "It registered its highest single-week sales during" → "The record's highest single-week sales were during"
• "It eventually went on to" → "One in a Million eventually went on to" and like previous, please remove the link on double platinum and change to merely RIAA
• Pipe BMG Music Club to Bertelsmann Music Group
• "In the United Kingdom, the album debuted" → "In the UK, the album debuted"
• As I cannot see the translation, does the Japan source mention both the chart position and certification? If either is missing, please add a source for that one too.

Impact and legacy

• Quote box looks good!
• [128][126][127][130][132] is too many refs cluttered together; please re locate some to earlier in the sentence to fix this
• Remove link on electronic
• "of electronic music."" → "of electronic music"." per MOS:QUOTE
• Pipe FKA twigs to FKA Twigs
• Since the eponymous album was mentioned before, please simply re-word this to "experimentation found on Aaliyah in 2001" because it is clear from the italics
• Pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) per MOS:LINK2SECT
• "noted the expansion of its influence expanding to" reads monotonously; please use different terminology on one of these occasions
• "SZA and Jhené Aiko." → "SZA, and Jhené Aiko."
• "claimed the album cemented" → "asserted One in a Million cemented"
• "renewed, worldly purview."" → "renewed, worldly purview"."
• Since Janet Jackson is mentioned by full name earlier in the article and on the quotebox in the section, please simply change the prose to saying Jackson here
• "with elevating Missy Elliott and Timbaland's" → "with elevating Elliott and Timbaland's"
• "following the album's release.[158][159] Cinquemani stated the album established" → "following the release.[158][159] Cinquemani stated it established"
• Remove link on Timbo, as this is implied

Track listing

• Good

Personnel

• Use {{spaced ndash}} so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Charts

• Good

Certifications

• Good, especially with all these sources for sales

Release history

• The US source for August 27 does not give both cassette and CD

See also

• Remove Aaliyah discography; this is too obvious

References

Notes

• Pipe BMG Music Service to Bertelsmann Music Group

Citations

• Copyvio score looks too high at 68.1%; please cut down so much direct quoting to resolve this
• Cite Revolt as publisher instead on ref 7
• Cite CBS News as publisher instead on ref 9
• Pipe Complex to Complex (magazine) on refs 14, 34 and 37 per MOS:LINK2SECT
• Pipe Billboard to Billboard (magazine) on refs 20, 144 and 193
• Ref 38 is correct to pipe to Plugged In (publication), however this should be shown as Plugged In in the ref text
• Cite MTV News as publisher instead on refs 46, 47, 69 and 73
• Okayplayer should be cited as publisher instead on refs 48 and 131
• Remove or replace ref 53 per WP:FORBES
• Remove link on Gateshead Post on ref 61 – this would be like linking New York Daily News to New York if the article disappears from Wiki
• Daily News → New York Daily News on ref 66
• Pipe Vogue Paris to Vogue France on ref 67
• Cite BuzzFeed as publisher instead on ref 70
• The Akron Beacon Journal → Akron Beacon Journal on ref 79
• New York Times → The New York Times on ref 83
• Remove or replace ref 118 per WP:SELFPUB
• Remove or replace ref 126 – no evidence of reliablity
• Cite Refinery29 as publisher instead on ref 161
• Cite Albumism as publisher instead on ref 164
• Solely cite zobbel.de on ref 176
• Cite BBC News as publisher instead on ref 190

Bibliography

• Pipe Atria Books to Atria Publishing Group

External links

• Good

Final comments and verdict

•  On hold until all of the issues are fixed; just about made it to completion, it is 10pm where I am and good luck with this one! --K. Peake 21:07, 14 June 2024 (UTC)

• OkIGetIt20 Thanks for implementing these as I picked up on despite no mention from you to me, however you still need to make the song titles inside quotes into singular speech marks ('); see reception for a good example. Also, please write out the notable lists in prose of the listing section since you do mention publications in the lead. --K. Peake 08:46, 16 June 2024 (UTC)

  You're Welcome! I just put the song titles into singular speech marks, and wrote the listing section in prose! OkIGetIt20 (talk) 16:56, 16 June 2024 (UTC)

• ✓ Pass now, well done on this! --K. Peake 08:15, 17 June 2024 (UTC)