Talk:Rat Saw God (Veronica Mars)/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 01:03, 11 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

Is it reasonably well written?
A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
"PCH biker", people unfamiliar with this show (like myself) will have no idea what PCH is, suggest clarifying it is a gang or simply omitting PCH

done

"who created the cult television series Buffy the Vampire Slayer, Angel, Firefly, and Agents of S.H.I.E.L.D." I really think you're giving way to much of his resume here. Why not simply introduce him as 'television director Josh Whedon'? You can then say in the next sentence "Veronica Mars has often been compared to Whedon's series Buffy the Vampire Slayer", or something like that.

done

"marking a decrease from Blast from the Past." Stating how much of a decrease would be helpful.

done

I can't say I like the wording of a lot of the synopsis.I.e "Gia Goodman talks to Dick Casablancas at a party. Woody Goodman has been elected mayor. Officers come in and arrest Logan for the murder of Felix Toombs." It all seems very blunt and unconnected, and doesn't flow very well when reading. I suppose that isn't a fail point in itself, but I thought I should mention it. I've taken the liberty of doing some rewording myself. The synopsis also assumes a lot of prior knowledge of the show. Obviously only people interested in the show are probably going to be reading this article, but nevertheless I think some things need to clarified. They are listed below:

"Gia Goodman talks to Dick Casablancas at a party." Talk about what? This isn't very helpful.

"Abel Koontz, who is dying" - dying from what?

"Logan is placed in a cell with his father, Aaron". Why is his father in the cell?

"Veronica finds out that Amelia called from Neptune the previous week". What is Neptune?

"dangles him off a window ledge, but he knows nothing" - how does it become apparent that he knows nothing, does he say he knows nothing? If so, I think you should say he says he knows nothing

"Weevil and Logan get into a fight" - What is the fight about?

"Keith goes inside the remains of the bus and finds the remains of a rat." Why are there only remains of a bus? Where did this bus come from? Why is he going into the bus?

B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
A. Has an appropriate reference section:
Ref 12 is dead.

done

B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
marsinvestigations.net states they are "an unofficial, nonprofit, unauthorized, unprofessional site done by a bunch of fans." What makes this source reliable?

I don't have any sourced material to Mars Investigations. It's just an external link (i.e. how The Simpsons episode articles usually include an external link to The Simpsons Archive.)

C. No original research:
Is it broad in its coverage?
A. Major aspects:

B. Focused:
Is it neutral?
Fair representation without bias:
Is it stable?
No edit wars, etc:
Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:

B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
Overall:
Pass or Fail: Placing on hold until minor issues are resolved. Freikorp (talk) 01:38, 11 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

@Freikorp: I hope this clears everything up! :) BenLinus 1214^talk 02:33, 11 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]

Reference 5 is from Mars Investigations, but I suppose since it is (apparently) an interview between the writers and the website, it can be considered reliable. I'm happy for this to pass now. Well done. Freikorp (talk) 02:42, 11 July 2015 (UTC)[reply]