Talk:Raya and the Last Dragon/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Some Dude From North Carolina (talk · contribs) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Hey, I'm going to be reviewing this article. Expect comments by the end of the week. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 23:14, 6 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, sure. Wingwatchers (talk) 00:12, 7 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Infobox and lead

All Done

The poster's non-free use rationale looks good.
The alt text for the poster feels generic. Expand it.

Done

Why do some billing credits have refs. and others don't?
The same source is used for two credits in "story by". Why?
Remove the Indonesia release date per WP:FILMRELEASE.

Done

Is the citation to The Numbers needed if it's wrong?
"impact towards" → "impact on"

Done

"As of June 29, 2021" - why such a specific date?
Add a serial comma after "story" (American English).

Done

Plot and cast

At 587 words, the plot section passes WP:FILMPLOT.
Add a serial comma after Tong.

Done

That's it here. #Cast also looks good.

Production

All Done

"Moana, Frozen, Zootopia" → "Frozen (2013), Moana (2016), and Zootopia (2016)"

Done

Add wikilinks for writers, directors, and producers since this is their first mention apart from the lead.
#Development says Paul Briggs was a co-director but the lead says otherwise. Clarify.
"the film is untitled at the time" → "the film was untitled at the time"

Done

This source doesn't mention "August 24, 2019" or the "D23 Expo Walt Disney Animation Studios' presentation panel".
"Variety reported" - this is a lie. Their own source even says: "Entertainment Weekly first reported the news".
"Don Hall (director of Winnie the Pooh and Big Hero 6) and" → "Don Hall, director of Winnie the Pooh (2011) and Big Hero 6 (2014), and"

Done

Put Blindspotting in italics and add "(2018)" in front of it.

Done

"based off" - should this be written as "based on"?

Done

"quippiness" - not a word.
Actually, #Production doesn't feel right.

Is there a reason #Development and #Casting can't be merged?

Done

We go from "August 24, 2019" to "August 2, 2019" to "August 27, 2020" as a result of the current ordering. This source is about Cassie Steele being recast but it's first used in #Development to mention the directors as if that was the main topic being "reported". There is also a tendency to specify dates when "In [Month] [Year]" is already enough, and also publishers ("Deadline Hollywood said this, The Hollywood Reporter said that" becomes repetitive). This entire section should be rewritten for clarity.

Fixed (hopefully)

"plot line" → "plotline"

Done

"for why" - kinda wordy

Fixed

Serial comma after "hair style".

Done

"hair style" → "hairstyle"

Done

"equipments" → "equipment"

Done

Make "Music" a subsection per WP:FILMMUSIC.

Done

Release

This source doesn't mention "November 25, 2020".
"and is [...] and as of" - repetitive.

Fixed

Home media should be expanded to list its special features.

Added

Reception

Several topics about the film's performance at the box office are unsourced; I marked them with the "citation needed" tag.
"thanks in-part", "closely behind", "huge jump" - doesn't sound encyclopedic.
Add a WP:DATECOMMA after June 4, 2021.

Done

The critical response section only includes 4 individual reviews in its second paragraph. Per WP:RECEPTION, try adding more reviews while also lowering the use of "A said B".
Put IndieWire in italics and wikilink SFGate.

All Done

Future

Should be expanded to more than one sentence.

Done

References

Sources are archived.
There are several references on the article's talk page that can be used.
Wikilink Justin Chang and Rachel Martin (broadcast journalist).

Done

ScreenRant → Screen Rant

Done

I would suggest listing CBR by its full name, Comic Book Resources.

Done

Change quotation marks to apostrophes per WP:QWQ (#18, #41, and #76).

Done

Sort categories in alphabetical order.

Done

Progress

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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@Wingwatchers: could you put {{done}} or such under the things you've done to make it more easy to navigate? Thanks. Pamzeis (talk) 01:53, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Pamzeis:

Done Wingwatchers (talk) 02:23, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, All done. Wingwatchers (talk) 18:16, 8 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

Some references still need to be adjusted for WP:QWQ. Additionally, the production section is also still out of place, using specific dates that are later out of order and become confusing for readers. Some Dude From North Carolina (talk) 00:52, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

@Some Dude From North Carolina:, thank you Pamzeis for fixing them. [1] Wingwatchers (talk) 02:54, 9 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]

I have added three reviews in the "Critical response" section, hopefully, it will pass GA. Wingwatchers (talk) 04:32, 10 July 2021 (UTC)[reply]