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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 21:23, 21 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]


I should complete this by tomorrow at the latest Jaguar 21:23, 21 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it reasonably well written?
    A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
    B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
  2. Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
    A. Has an appropriate reference section:
    B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
    C. No original research:
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. Major aspects:
    B. Focused:
  4. Is it neutral?
    Fair representation without bias:
  5. Is it stable?
    No edit wars, etc:
  6. Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
    B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:

Initial comments

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  • "It was released in 2010 in Japan and 2011 in North America and Europe" - release dates could be more specific to each region, but this is just a suggestion
  • "creatures known as the Twisted have appeared from beneath Manhattan and decimated the city" - Manhattan isn't a city, would it sound better being replaced with "New York City" or creatures known as the Twisted have appeared from beneath Manhattan and decimated New York City?
  • The lead summarises the article well so this meets the GA criteria
  • "Aya can receive briefings for missions, view additional documents, and buy and customize new weapons" - no need for this extra "and" here
  • "When activated, Aya entered "Liberation Mode", a state enabling her to move around the battlefield" - why is this in past tense?
  • "a company created by former Capcom staff members who had first worked on the high-definition remaster of Rez" - this part has no citation
  • Is there no track list for the Music section?
  • "Reorchestrations of two pieces of classical music" - should have a hyphen

References

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  • No dead links, though I don't know what's happened to the European and North American external links...

Close - promoted

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Honestly I could find nothing wrong with this article that would have made this be put on hold, so I'll promote this straight away. The above points I found were mostly minor prose issues, though I would recommend addressing them if you want to FAC this. Some minor points included a sentence being in past tense and no specific release dates in the lead, but other than that this was a great article. Its comprehensiveness and good prose makes it a Good Article, well done Jaguar 18:53, 23 April 2015 (UTC)[reply]