Talk:Travis Konecny/GA1
Appearance
GA Review[edit]
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
GA toolbox |
---|
Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Reviewer: Kavyansh.Singh (talk · contribs) 14:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
Nominator: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) at at 19:53, 25 October 2021 (UTC)
GA criteria[edit]
GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not) |
---|
|
Overall: |
· · · |
Comments[edit]
Lead
Just prior to the 2016–17 NHL season, Flyers general manager Ron Hextall
— linking 'general manager' seems over-linking.but struggled after the interruptions caused by the COVID-19 pandemic
— 'struggled' doesn't seem the best word here. Can we rephrase a bit?
Early life
He grew up in Clachan, Ontario,
— Just like the lead, I think writing this as just 'Clachan' would suffice. Especially as 'Ontario' has already been mentioned in the previous sentence.Although began playing
— missing 'he'
Playing career
- Just as the lead, mention that 'Ontario Hockey League' is abbreviated to 'OHL'
- linking 'general manager' seems over-linking, here as well
By January,
→ "By January 2017,"After taking a hit against the St. Louis Blues on February 6, however, Konecny was
— can remove 'however' and the commas from this sentenceafter his battle with the virus
— needs to be rephrased.
International play
Konecny made his international debut with a number of performances for Canada in under-18 tournaments in 2014.
— pipe 'in under-18 tournaments' to Canada men's national under-18 ice hockey teamagainst Sweden
— the linking makes it appear like WP:EGG
Player profile
- "176 lb" in infobox v. "178 pounds" in this section.
he has learned to focus on speed and agility over strength
— can't say this in Wikipedia's voicefrequently "chirping" insults
— Avoid quoting single words. (MOS:QUOTEPOV)
Personal life
Awards and honours
- I made a general table formatting edit. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
References
- Few sources have website/news agency linked (example. The Province, Hockey-Reference.com, etc.) while most other have not. Suggesting to be consistent. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
- In the process of fixing per MOS:REFLINK. I have been told before by MOS:DUPLINK that you should not repeat linked citation works, but I see now that is incorrect. It appears there is no official policy either way, just that you can duplink citations. — GhostRiver 18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
- Moreover, if I am not mistaken, this point lies outside the GA criteria, so it can be ignored. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:17, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
- In the process of fixing per MOS:REFLINK. I have been told before by MOS:DUPLINK that you should not repeat linked citation works, but I see now that is incorrect. It appears there is no official policy either way, just that you can duplink citations. — GhostRiver 18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
Looking good overall, just few minor comments. – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 15:29, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
- Kavyansh.Singh I have made all edits except where noted. Unfortunately, I don't think I can review the article you suggested, as I have a number of deadlines in the coming weeks that will limit my on-Wiki effectiveness. — GhostRiver 18:07, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
- No issues at-all. Will read the article again with a view to pass it soon. Thanks for all your work here! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:17, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
Other comments[edit]
- Also, it would be appreciated if you could review Day of Infamy speech, which I want to feature on the main page on December 7/8, so I'll need it to be GA soon. No issues if you cannot. Thanks! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:49, 28 November 2021 (UTC)
- Happy to pass the article! – Kavyansh.Singh (talk) 18:35, 2 December 2021 (UTC)
The discussion above is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.