Talk:Union Jack Club

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In paragraph 3 under this heading, the following appears: "The Prince of Wales laid the foundation stone of the club in July 1904[2]:135 and later as King Edward VII ..." Queen Victoria died on 22 January 1901, at which time the then Prince of Wales became King Edward VII, so he was already King Edward VII in July 1904. Suggest a rewording of this sentence, such as: "The foundation stone of the club was laid by King Edward VII in July 1904[2]:135 and later, together with Queen Alexandra, he officially opened the club in July 1907.[2]:91"Haynesta (talk) 15:21, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Good catch! The source says only "Prince of Wales", so I'd guess it must be referring to George V. I've amended the passage. See if you think it's right now. Ibadibam (talk) 15:35, 31 July 2017 (UTC)[reply]

Looks fine now but I might have reversed the second clause, i.e. "... and the club was officially opened in July 1907 by King Edward VII together with Queen Alexandra." My reasoning was a little out of kilter as I assumed you were suggesting that the same person had completed both tasks but with different titles. However, Edward VII's son was created Prince of Wales on 9 November 1901 and became King George V on 6 May 1910.Haynesta (talk) —Preceding undated comment added 15:05, 30 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]

I had made that assumption as well, until I checked the source. So Prince George laid the cornerstone, and King Edward opened the club, right? And are you suggesting we put the second clause in the passive voice? To put emphasis on the event over its participants? Ibadibam (talk) 19:10, 31 August 2017 (UTC)[reply]