Template:Did you know nominations/Elliott Loughlin

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The result was: promoted by Crisco 1492 (talk) 23:47, 15 January 2012 (UTC)

Elliott Loughlin

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... that during All-American basketball player Elliott Loughlin's U.S. Navy career, he earned two Navy Crosses, two Legions of Merit and one Silver Star?

Reviewed: Thomas Alexander Barns
Comment: Created by Jrcla2 on January 9, then expanded by JMOprof

Created/expanded by Jrcla2 (talk), JMOprof (talk). Nominated by Jrcla2 (talk) at 16:29, 11 January 2012 (UTC)

Long enough. Sources verified against offline books. Hook okay, but would have expected one about his unusual court martial like: "... that when All-American basketball player Elliott Loughlin was court martialed in 1945, the court received a more serious penalty than he did?"

We had debated putting something about his court-martial in there, but I thought it would be too derogatory for a DYK hook. If you think it's ok, however, I would prefer the hook you mentioned. Jrcla2 (talk) 20:44, 12 January 2012 (UTC)

I also prefer the reviewer's proposed hook. JMOprof (talk) 00:59, 13 January 2012 (UTC)
- That's fine then. Ready to go. Hawkeye7 (talk) 01:23, 13 January 2012 (UTC)