Template:Did you know nominations/John FitzWalter, 2nd Baron FitzWalter
- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 06:41, 3 December 2018 (UTC)
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John FitzWalter, 2nd Baron FitzWalter
[edit]- ... that in 1342 John, Lord FitzWalter accused men from Colchester of invading and damaging his park at Lexden, and soon after, besieged the town for over two months? Source: For 1342, V. C. H. (1994). A History of the County of Essex. IX: The Borough of Colchester. London: Victoria County History; for FitzWalters accusations, Starr, C. (2004). "Fitzwalter family (per. c. 1200–c. 1500)", Oxford Dictionary of National Biography; for the damage done, Furber, E. C. (1953). Essex Sessions of the Peace, 1351, 1377-1379. Colchester: Essex Archaeological Society; for the link between the two events, Britnell, R. H. (1988). "The Fields and Pastures of Colchester, 1280–1350". Transactions of the Essex Archaeological and History Society. 3rd series. 19.; for the siege itself and its duration, V. C. H.
Created by Serial Number 54129 (talk). Self-nominated at 17:18, 7 October 2018 (UTC).
Doing... beginning review for nomination. Flibirigit (talk) 18:17, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
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Policy compliance:
- Adequate sourcing:
- Neutral:
- Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:
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| Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation |
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| QPQ: Done. |
Overall: 
Questions noted below. Hook is cited, discussed at length in the article, and sources are accepted by AGF. Flibirigit (talk) 18:27, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
Questions:
- In the second paragraph of the "Criminal career" section, the note at the end of the paragraph seems to have a broken link. Is it supposed to point to a footnote?
- In the "Early life" section, is it possible to reword "a recent biographer has suggested"? Same for the opening sentence of the "Criminal career" section. I can see folks asking questions of how recent, and who.
- In the "Early life" section, there is a "Why" maintenance tag to be looked into.
- First paragraph of "Criminal career" section, instead of "It has been suggested" it is better to say who said it.
- The boxed quote in the "Criminal career" section has a "30/", it seems like a typo?
Paraphrasing: Earwig highlighted several areas of concern. I noted a list of proper nouns, book titles, and a directly attributed quote from a dictionary, none of which are violations. The remaining question is noted below:
- In the section "Later life", the phrase "play an important role in suppressing the Peasants' Revolt in Essex" is very close to the original as per Earwig.
Overall the article is very well written, enjoyable to read, and very close to being approved for DYK. I noted a couple minor issues above. @Serial Number 54129:, when you're ready please ping me, and I can give it a final check. Thanks! I see you've made several changes. Going through them now. Flibirigit (talk) 21:31, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
I have reviewed the recent changes which have answered my questions above, and the also the noted paraphrasing issue. Accepting hooks citation as per AGF noted above, and approving DYK nomination. Flibirigit (talk) 21:57, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
I am returning this back to the nomination stage to clarify one of my questions above. In the boxed quote in the "Criminal career" section it now reads Pound sign30. I am confused what that means. Could you please explain. Thank you. Flibirigit (talk) 23:37, 19 November 2018 (UTC)
- Flibirigit, I can't find the issue in question, so it appears to have been addressed. Can you please check and, if so, reapprove the nomination? Many thanks. BlueMoonset (talk) 20:29, 30 November 2018 (UTC)
- It appears things are good to go now. Flibirigit (talk) 04:19, 3 December 2018 (UTC)