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What does the article (or section) do well?

- Good progress

- Good structure to the article, good flow of logic


What changes would you suggest overall?

- Intro is too rhetorical, needs to be purely based on fact, so I'd suggest getting rid of the set of questions in the beginning that you would normally use in an essay and replacing with a definition right off the bat

- Try to cite at least one source for every sentence, this ensures that the content coheres to wikipedia standards instead of being an essay


What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution?

- cite more sources, again preferably one for every sentence.


Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know!

- there are many different sections that forms a good logical flow, I should have a more complex structure to my article


Zhang.eu (talk) 15:41, 28 February 2020 (UTC) Zhang.eu[reply]


What does the article (or section) do well? I thought you did a good job explaining why these type of diets are good for the body and liked how you did it in a list format so that it was more clear for the reader to understand. I also thought you did a good job explaining the history and reasoning behind why people started this diet in the first place.

What changes would you suggest overall? I would suggest that you include a section about why some people think these diets aren't good or aren't the best for the body to make the overall article sound less bias. Would also recommend that you add footnotes when you mention specific research or make claims.

What is the most important thing that the author could do to improve his/her contribution? same as above

Did you glean anything from your classmate's work that could be applicable to your own? If so, let him/her know! I like the formatting and thought you did a good job explaining how exactly these diets work. — Preceding unsigned comment added by Yanni910 (talkcontribs) 15:30, 28 February 2020 (UTC)[reply]