User talk:Munstudent22/sandbox

Peer Review

Great job, your article sounds really interesting ... I do have a couple of suggestions though. First of all, considering your lead provides a clear well written summary of the dance behaviour, the "description" section you included might not be necessary. Also, I would consider seperating the "communication profitability section" from the larger "mechanism" section. I think this would help with clarity and organization, and considering you have plenty of well written, well referenced material in that section it could stand alone. The "distance" section under your larger "mechanism" section is a little short ... of course you know the amount of material out there better than I do, but if you could find a bit more information for that section I think that would be helpful. Again, I thought your writing was clear and neutral, and I think the picture you included really adds to the article!

Nice Job! Orpm97 (talk) 18:09, 7 November 2018 (UTC)

Peer Review Livkelly18

Your article is very well done! Your thoughts are organized well and show a neutral tone throughout. I do have a few minor suggestions:

1. Under your Mechanisms sections you have a subtitle "Communicating Distance and Direction" but then you describe Direction first, I personally would flip them around so I would talk about Distance first because it was mentioned first 2. You could add an image of the honey bee because many people do not know that not all bees look the same 3. You could add a link to a video of a honey bee completing a round dance 4. You could explain the differences between the waggle dance and the round dance a little more

Overall a very well done draft! I really liked how you had various links throughout the article. I felt I had very little to add because you covered almost everything very throughly!

Great job! — Preceding unsigned comment added by Livkelly18 (talk • contribs) 23:44, 7 November 2018 (UTC)