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The following is an archived discussion of a featured article nomination. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the article's talk page or in Wikipedia talk:Featured article candidates. No further edits should be made to this page.

The article was promoted by Gog the Mild via FACBot (talk) 14 July 2022 [1].


Nominator(s): ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:40, 13 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Here is my 14th nomination of a season in the history of my beloved Gillingham F.C. This was the club's first season for 15 years at the fourth level of English football, which is timely as they have just been relegated to the fourth tier once again - sad times....... As ever, feedback will be most gratefully received and promptly acted upon..... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 20:40, 13 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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Support from Gog the Mild

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Recusing to review.

  • "meaning that they started the new season with a number of teenagers in the team. Gillingham started the season in poor form". " ... started the new season ... started the season ..." A little repetitive. Any chance of a bit of variation.
  • "goalkeeper Jeremy Roberts played as a trialist in that game ... he never played a game for Gillingham". Er ...
  • "he played for the first time in the home game against Scunthorpe United". How can it be his first game if he had scored "7 goals in 13 games"?
  • "after three league games they were still yet to score a goal". Delete "still".
  • "Lovell scored the only goal in the last 10 minutes". This has another meaning than the one you intend and so could do with rephrasing.
  • Link semi-professional.
  • "Key". In those competitions where they don't apply, is it helpful to include "o.g." and "pen."?
  • "both made a total of 51 appearances". "both" → 'each'. Likewise in the lead.

That is all I have. Lovely stuff. Gog the Mild (talk) 13:23, 23 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Gog the Mild: - all addressed, let me know what you think now....... -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 13:30, 23 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments by Wehwalt

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  • "but then slipped down the table after losing six consecutive games;" the slipping no doubt happened "as" or "whilst" losing, rather than "after".
  • "With injuries also ruling out Alan Walker, Tim O'Shea and Brian Clarke and further new signings not yet completed,[17] " should there be a comma after O'Shea? This seems to be your general practice.
  • "The draw, along with the results of the day's other games, left Gillingham nine points off the play-off places and therefore, with two games remaining and a maximum of six points available, unable to finish the season with any possibility of promotion." This seems a bit long-winded, especially the final clause. Cannot it be shortened?
That's all I have.--Wehwalt (talk) 21:49, 23 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Wehwalt: - many thanks for your review, see what you think of these changes -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:32, 24 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
@Wehwalt: - any further comments? -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:57, 30 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]
All looks good. Support.--Wehwalt (talk) 11:27, 30 June 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Support Comments by FrB.TG

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Support by Amakuru

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  • "a number of players left the club, resulting in a number of teenagers playing..." - repetition of "a number"
  • "a run of five consecutive wins" - feel like some indication of when this was would be helpful?
  • "does not appear to have ever signed a contract" - slightly odd wording to be in Wikivoice; maybe just "there is no record of..." or similar?
  • "Alan Walker, Tim O'Shea, and Brian Clarke and further new signings not yet completed..." - I feel like a comma might be helpful after "Clarke" otherwise it sounds like we're lumping him with the further new signings? Not entirely certain if I'm right on that point though.
  • "the latter two of whom" - should be "the last two of whom"
  • Be consistent for league places - 4th/14th or fourth/fourteenth
  • Similarly in "Players" section, we see "16 goals" then "nine goals" in the same paragraph.
  • "Writing in his final programme notes of the season, Richardson contended that the team" - 'contended' is a slightly odd word, and perhaps a breach of MOS:SAID, albeit not one of the listed examples... Might be simpler just to say "In his final programme notes of the season, Richardson wrote that the team..."
  • "Gillingham would eventually achieve promotion back" - might just be me, but I prefer a simpler "Gillingham eventually achieved promotion..." here.

That's about it. Great article as ever. Cheers  — Amakuru (talk) 21:53, 6 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Amakuru: - many thanks for your review, all done I think -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:37, 7 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
Thanks! Happy to support.  — Amakuru (talk) 18:24, 12 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Comments Edwininlondon

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Another season, well done. I could not find much, but here are a few comments:

  • following day's games they had fallen back to 6th.[49] Following --> repetition of following
  • 18 November 1989 : the FA Cup table has the same date for replay and initial match
  • again inconsistent; following a lengthy unbeaten run in the first half of the season the team were again --> repetition again
Source review
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Quality ok. Formatting as well, with just these comments:

That's it from me. Edwininlondon (talk) 16:37, 10 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Yes. All fine now. I Support on prose. Source review: pass. Edwininlondon (talk) 06:03, 11 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@FAC coordinators: - can I check if I am now OK to start a new FAC? Thanks!! -- ChrisTheDude (talk) 07:28, 11 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Sure Chris. Cheers, Ian Rose (talk) 08:51, 11 July 2022 (UTC)[reply]
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