Wikipedia:Peer review/Lead service line/archive1

Lead service line

I've listed this article for peer review because I would like to prepare this article to be nominated for the Featured Article. I have done Good Article before and have a pretty good understanding about what it takes to create a Good Article. However, this will be the first time for me to take an article to the Featured Article status. Therefore, it will be great if you can provide feedback so that I can improve before nominating it to the FA.

Thanks, Z22 (talk) 07:16, 20 October 2019 (UTC)

Comments from Tim riley

This looks in pretty good shape to me, and worth a pop at FAC. It seems comprehensive and appears balanced on the whole, though the "Widespread hazards and causes" section appears to deal with a single country to the exclusion of the rest of the world. You could improve the prose throughout by pruning some of the "howevers": the word appears ten times and would in most cases be better omitted. In the second para of the "European Union" section I think you have an unwanted definite article in "the northern Germany continued to use lead pipes". There are a couple of phrases in bold type in the "Background" section that I wonder about, but someone better versed in the Manual of Style than I am will let you know soon enough at FAC if bold type is wrong there. I hope these few points are useful. Tim riley talk 15:07, 5 November 2019 (UTC)