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List of Oxford United F.C. managers

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I've listed this article for peer review because i would like any comments on how i could make the list a featured list. Although this article is less than a day old, i think there is already a lot of information provided in the article. Thanks, Eddie6705 (talk) 21:55, 29 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

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For some of the featured lists of this type it has been found that Soccerbase is sometimes inaccurate for management dates, so a second source would be helpful for confirmation.
their first official manager since turning professional in August 1949 "official manager" seems a contrived term, and isn't used by the ref. Try something like "After turning professional in August 1949, Headington appointed Harry Thompson as manager".
The prose has big chronological gaps, for example it jumps from 1969 to 1982.
It needs explaining that Headington United is the former name of Oxford United.
Division One, not Division 1.
Harry was manager for more matches, but this can't be sourced. A dealbreaker in terms of becoming a featured list, as without this information the list is not comprehensive. It might not be on Soccerbase and it might not be easy, but it can definitely be sourced. A quick look on Amazon reveals a book "Oxford United: A complete record 1893-1989", which if it is anything like most of the other books in the Complete Record series will certainly have the information. Sadly it is out of print, but it might be possible to get it via an inter-library loan.
New manager, scout Maurice Evans - implies he was simultaneously both manager and scout.

Hope this helps. Oldelpaso (talk) 20:59, 30 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from The Rambling Man (talk · contribs)

Any chance of a free image?
The table could be sortable so we could easily see who won the most matches, managed the most matches etc...
Avoid bold in the lead wikilinks per WP:LEAD#Bold title.
Expand opening paragraph beyond a single sentence.
It's not entirely clear why you talk about Headington United in the lead.
Get rid of the space between citations [7] and [8].
You don't need the Oxford United cat, the Oxford UNited managers cat is better refined.

That's about all I have. The Rambling Man (talk) 08:29, 31 March 2008 (UTC)[reply]

Comments from Struway2 (talk · contribs)

Lead. In general, could do with a bit of a copyedit for grammar/punctuation. I'm sure someone would be willing to have a go at it if you want.
The reference for the club turning pro and/or Thompson's appointment doesn't mention August. The Oxford Mail club history, written by OUFC's historian, has him appointed in July and sacked in November 1958, which is not what the lead says. Rage Online has his last game as 6 November, and their unnamed caretaker manager page seems to cover the gap between him and Turner, but unfortunately it includes at least one other caretaker period as well.
Ramón Díaz, not Ramon Diaz.
Table. Your choice of table format looks odd when sorted, because the alternating background shade, which looks fine as first presented, is retained by each row when sorted, so for instance if you sort by name, the first five rows are light, the next few darker, etc.
Dates. If the "From" date is autoformatted, then so should the "to" date be. And the format should be consistent within the article; if you have 1 August 1949 in the table, then you should have 9 November 2007 in the lead rather than November 9, 2007 (or vice versa).
If you're taking the first-of-the-month appointment dates or last-of departure dates from Soccerbase without any corroboration, you'd be as well to just put the month rather than the whole date. Their policy if they don't know the accurate date, which they generally don't unless it's quite a recent appointment, is to assume the manager came in on the first or left on the last.
There's no need for the Achievements column to be in small font. Those of us with poor eyesight struggle to read it.
Where are the achievements sourced from?
Champions, Winners, Promotion don't really need capitals. Consider losing the semicolons from after the years, and linking the year if appropriate (1986 league cup final has an article, the division championships could link to the relevant "yyyy-xx in English football" article).
Numeric columns would look better centred (or right-aligned) than left-aligned.
Win percentage. If it's zero, put 0.00 rather than a dash.
Sources. Thompson, there's not much point citing Soccerbase as they don't have most of his career. Turner, you've cited Soccerbase but taken figures from Rage Online. Smith, the figures in the table don't bear much relation to either source cited (which probably has something to do with Soccerbase seeming to think Smith is still manager of Oxford, as Patterson's Soccerbase figures only relate to his spells as caretaker).

hope some of this helps, cheers, Struway2 (talk) 22:30, 1 April 2008 (UTC)[reply]