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I've listed this article for peer review because I want to improve it to GA status.

Thanks, lunaeclipse ^(talk) 20:19, 14 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]

Comments after a quick skim:

Suggest merging the first and second paragraph of the lede.
The lede focuses too much on the release of the first season. I would delete most of that information and add information about the development of the series.
Merge the single-sentence paragraphs in the "Production" and "Broadcast" sections with other paragraphs.
Expand the "Home media" section or merge it with "Broadcast"
The reception section needs to be expanded. Include the Metacritic rating, if possible. Additional sources can be found using Metacritic and search engines.
In reception, avoid the "X says Y" pattern. WP:RECEPTION has ideas on how to do this.

I hope this helps. Z1720 (talk) 16:43, 20 June 2024 (UTC)[reply]