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Washington State Route 532

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I feel that this article may be the next Washington GA. I hope to get this to GAN by the end of the summer and get pictures later this month. This article may need copyediting, as my grammar isn't quite polished. Thanks! –CG 21:06, 19 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Finetooth comments: Looks pretty good to me. I made a few minor c/e fixes, and I have a short list of suggestions, all minor.

Infobox

The link from the infobox to an external site, RCW 47.17.760, should be changed to an inline citation, I believe, giving the title, publisher, url, and access date. If you use RCW in the infobox text, it should be written out as well as abbreviated. Readers might guess at a general meaning but probably won't know what the letters stand for.
- It is part of the infobox, so I cannot fix it, also it is already referenced as citation 2. –CG 19:54, 28 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Lead

You might add "in the United States" to the first sentence for readers who may not know that Washington is a U.S. state.
"and ends at an interchange with I-5" - Perhaps spell out Interstate 5 (I-5) on first use?
"The road first appeared on a map in 1911 and was designated Secondary State Highway 1Y (SSH 1Y) in 1945, which later became SR 532 in 1964." - Delete "later" since 1964 is later. Also,put modifier next to modified? Suggestion: "The road first appeared on a map in 1911 and in 1945 was designated Secondary State Highway 1Y (SSH 1Y), which became SR 532 in 1964."
"Currently, the Washington State Department of Transportation... " - "As of 2009" rather than "currently"?
- All done. –CG 19:54, 28 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Route description

"After its western terminus and the Stillaguamish River bridge, a daily average of 20,000 motorists used these sections of SR 532 in 2007, higher than the 3,500 that used the same stretch of road in 1970." - Something seems to be missing. "After the western terminus and the Stillaguamish River bridge were finished... "? Or, "were opened"? Or maybe "After its western terminus and the Stillaguamish River bridge were completed in 2007, a daily average... ". Should something about the bridge construction go into the "History" section? Was the western terminus built after most of the rest of the roadway? What did it consist of? I am confused.
- The sentence refers to the location and the fact that it is the busiest section of the highway. –CG 19:54, 28 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

History"

"WSDOT began seeking contractors in August 2008 and found four by September." - "Hired four" or "signed contracts with four" rather than "found four"?
- Donce. –CG 19:54, 28 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

References

I changed citation 30 so that the newspaper name appears in italics. The trick with {{cite news}} to accomplish this is to use the |work parameter for the newspaper name rather than the |publisher parameter. The other citations with newspaper names should be changed too. It looks like there's about a half-dozen more altogether.
- Done. –CG 19:54, 28 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

Images"

The train station sounds like a good possibility for an additional interesting photo.
- Eventually I will go there (I live just south of the area) and take pictures of the road and later the train station. –CG 19:54, 28 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]

I hope these comments prove helpful. If so, please consider reviewing another article, especially one from the PR backlog. That is where I found this one. Finetooth (talk) 04:53, 27 June 2009 (UTC)[reply]