User talk:Justus1455/sandbox

Peer Review- Luke Tasker

"How could your peer improve the lead" You could break up the first sentence into multiple sentences. It is a bit of a run on sentence. "Is the overall article structure clear" Yes, the overall article structure is pretty clear. No changes appear necessary. "Is there balanced coverage of the topic? Is the tone neutral" Yes the tone is neutral, there appears to be no bias or uneven coverage. "Are the sources reliable" Yes it appears that all of the sources are reliable. Most of the sources are government sites or reputable journal entries. "What proofreading or writing suggestions do you have to improve the article?" I'd say just give the grammar a quick look over, besides that the article seems pretty good. "What other things would you add or fix in the article?" I would just expand on the Convention Contents, it seems a bit short. Other than that it seems pretty good.